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She no longer knows.
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a swirling shadow claims her pail allure.
Her face a memory that I once prized
buried in ghouls born by an evil pure
that through her, render true desires disguised.
the shadows I endeavor to, just, graze
in my hand shades dissolve, and leave a fear
and broiled skin. Tempests breed upon the haze,
that strikes and smolders those that stray a-near
perhaps a brightened blaze would clear the shade,
or mayhap I could cloak the light, and stare
as specters fade away - absolving maid
Of broken soul, its hatred through despair.
Her burdened surface I attempt and trudge,
Her spirit I only can try and judge.
Her face a memory that I once prized
buried in ghouls born by an evil pure
that through her, render true desires disguised.
the shadows I endeavor to, just, graze
in my hand shades dissolve, and leave a fear
and broiled skin. Tempests breed upon the haze,
that strikes and smolders those that stray a-near
perhaps a brightened blaze would clear the shade,
or mayhap I could cloak the light, and stare
as specters fade away - absolving maid
Of broken soul, its hatred through despair.
Her burdened surface I attempt and trudge,
Her spirit I only can try and judge.
For the past four days, I have been struggling to learn how to write in meter. I can finally say that I think I am getting the hang of it. This sonnet is my first sonnet, and the first poem I have ever written fully in meter. As all ways, critiques, feedback and advice is highly appreciated
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I really enjoyed the rhythm. You really did match up the meter perfectly!